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She wrote me:

This is the time of all things read;
the time of books, clean hands, straw dogs,
shared looks. This is the time
that finds the time to settle down;
to open that smile with enormous plans;
to pound on metal rolled with rust;
to lie when lovers lie, alone, quiet,
in kitsch and style.



She wrote me:

Death for some is a careless cat,
one that lacks a voice—and love—
and never plays chess.
But that is not my choice.
You see, I prefer the quieter sort;
the kind of death that stalks one
through shapeless blur, a caress of trust
and a lack of breath—now three, now two—
a sweet bluff and a face that looks
of you, only that's not enough.

I remember the films during which you cry,
and the way you hide it, fiddling
with your change to make your eyes avoid
the two mice riddling some pocket full of holes.

I remember the nights you tried to pray.
You clasped your hands and dreamt up God
and what he may or may not do. And I,
following November, came with you.

I remember the calls you made, long,
arboreal affairs of historical silence,
but I thought it wrong to say I knew
that metaphorical was never your intent.
History never dies.

The rains are worshiped here.
They bear a name that all chant
in line, and with a script scrawled
by sticks and minds, each has its own piece
and place to finally say what should be said—
to be erased.
Morning came early today,
and with it—dread;
and with it—rain.



She wrote me:

Soon is where the rockets stop.
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Heavily inspired by the works of Chris Marker, specifically the structure and themes of his 1982 film Sans Soleil.
Daily Deviation, 2008-10-06

Daily DeviationPassenger by ~kaujot spoke to me the moment I read it. Reading it again, I was reminded that indeed 'History never dies.' (Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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I'm really interested in where "Passenger" came from. Remind me to ask you about it.

I think it was a good idea to make "Morning came early today" it's own sentence. It is stronger that way.

I'm glad you wrote.:)
It was originally going to be called "Adventure," but I lost confidence in that, and I'm slowly losing confidence in "Passenger." We'll see if it stays that way.

I'm glad about the morning line, too. :)

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I saw, darling, but do lie.
Mark, even though I threaten to kick you if I ever achieve that rank, I love your poetry, and this is no exception.

"one that lacks a voice—and love—
and never plays chess."

And never plays chess. Man. +fav.
Thanks, sir. :)

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I saw, darling, but do lie.
10 points if you get the allusion the chess line is making.

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I saw, darling, but do lie.
The only chess allusion I'm knowledgeable of would be from Eliot's Waste Land.
Minus ten points.

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I saw, darling, but do lie.
This is a beautifully written piece. Sans the sentimentality, it may damn near be perfection. I think the most intriguing thing about the piece is that it raises so many questions about origins and where the heart of any relationship lies.

I know that I'm more or less a hack poet; however, I know what I like. Regardless of the fact that I may or may not know why a certain poem piques my interest, this piece has done just that.

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May God help me if I ever have to use my art...:blackrose:
I'm curious to know if you think sentimentality always lowers a poem, or just in the case of this.

Regardless of your answer, thank you very much for your kind words.

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I saw, darling, but do lie.

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